2016考研英語書信作文：這里有你努力的方向！

　　?5-7分
　　?第一篇
　　Dear Pro. Smith,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your assistance. If it had not been for your assistance in sending timely the list of reference books which I asked for, I fear that I would have not been achieved my essay on the deadline.
　　Everyone agrees that it was you who save munch valuable time for me to search the reference books in the library and these reference books which are rather professional conform to the requirements of my essay. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                        Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                              Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Pro. Smith,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your assistance. If it had not been for your assistance in sending timely(刪掉)the list of reference books(加to me timely) which I asked for, I fear that I would have not been achieved my essay on(改為by ) the deadline.
　　Everyone agrees that it was you who save(改為saved) munch (拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為much)valuable time for me to search the reference books in the library and these reference books which are rather professional conform to the requirements of my essay. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                          Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                                 Li Ming
　　6分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫作文時(shí)要再細(xì)心一些，盡量避免單詞拼寫的錯(cuò)誤。時(shí)態(tài)要保持前后一致。

　　?第二篇
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm reception in this travel abroad. If it had not been for your assistance in this traveling that you are as a guide for me, I fear that I would have been lost so that I cannot find the way coming back.
　　Everyone agrees that it was you who patiently guide me to every tourist attractions and explain some of peculiar stories about sceneries. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                      Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                             Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm reception in this travel (改為in the journey)abroad. If it had not been for your assistance in this traveling (改為on the trip)that you are as a guide for me, I fear that I would have been lost so that I cannot(改為couldn’t) find the way coming back.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who patiently guide(改為guided) me to every tourist attractions and explain some of peculiar stories about sceneries. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                         Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                                 Li Ming
　　6分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：作文寫得還不錯(cuò)，但應(yīng)保持時(shí)態(tài)的前后一致以及固定搭配。

　　?第三篇
　　Dear Teacher,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your ongoing patience and selfless care. If it had not been for your assistance in our English study, I fear that I would have been failed my CET4 and CET6.
　　Even one agrees that it was you who has always been devoting most of your free time to day to day English teaching and instruction in test-taking skills. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                   Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                           Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Teacher,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your ongoing patience and selfless care. If it had not been for your assistance in our English study, I fear that I would have been failed(改為failing)(加to pass) my CET4 and CET6.
　　Even one agrees that it was you who has(改為 had) always been devoting most of your free time to day to day English teaching and instruction(改為instructing) in test-taking skills. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                     Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                            Li Ming
　　7分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：作文沒有什么大問題，但是要注意時(shí)態(tài)的一致以及某些句型的固定用法。

　　?第四篇
　　Dear sir,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining，I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who always helping others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                          Yours sincerely
　　修改意見：
　　Dear sir,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining，I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who always helping(改為 helped) others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                      Yours sincerely(加逗號(hào))
　　                                                                                                    加名字
　　5分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：小作文的字?jǐn)?shù)要求是100詞，不要少于100詞，否則是要扣分的。書信的寫作格式要牢記于心。要注意時(shí)態(tài)的一致性。雖然作文沒有什么大問題，但內(nèi)容過于簡(jiǎn)單，其實(shí)你可以把內(nèi)容再擴(kuò)充一下，用一些高級(jí)的詞匯和句型。

　　?第五篇
　　Dear Ms. Wang,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness help last week. If it had not been for your assistance in bringing me my admission card for examination in time, I fear that I would have been missed the opportunity to be a servant in the government which I have prepared for a long time.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who are my deliverer to save me from such troublesome situation. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                    Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                             Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Ms. Wang,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness(改為kind) help last week. If it had not been for your assistance in bringing me my admission card for examination in time, I fear that I would have been missed(改為missing) the opportunity to be a servant in the government which I have prepared for a long time.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who are(改為were) my deliverer to save me from such troublesome situation. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                       Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                             Li Ming
　　6分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫作文時(shí)要再認(rèn)真一點(diǎn)，寫完后再檢查一遍，有些小錯(cuò)就可以及時(shí)改正，另外，建議你去看一下虛擬語氣的句型。時(shí)態(tài)要保持一致。